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Saturday, August 14, 2010
Sigrid's Final
A fanfiction based on the film My Neighbour Totoro by Hayao Miyazaki. A children's film in which two girls meet the spirit of the forest, Totoro. This fanfic is focused on a cat that has a bit-part in the film.
Satsuki and Mei's mother was in hospital. Dad had said that she was sick and had to get out of the city to get better. Satsuki and Mei didn't complain when they moved house, even though it tired them putting all the stuff in boxes. Hairpins, kimonos and other trinkets reminded them of their mother and made Satsuki's eyes fill with tears, but she put on a brave face for Mei and wiped them away. They were moving closer to the hospital in the country. Their new house was only a two mile cycle away.
Their house was unmistakable. Shrouded in overgrown vines and hidden under avalanches of cherry blossom, Satsuki was thrown by it's character. "If Dad was a house this is what he'd look like. It must be a thousand years old! " she thought to herself. The pillars were falling down, their weathered paint and rotted wood decayed from its years uninhabited. The grass in its fields had become so overgrown all of Mei but the bow in her hair disappeared into it. "SATSUKI! SATSUKI! There is so much gardening to do!" she yelled, darting in and out of the bushes, picking up acorns and throwing them back onto the ground.
It didn't take long for Mei, Satsuki and Dad to make the new house a home. Granny, who lived in the next field over, helped with the chores and Dad steamed rice every night. He was getting better at cooking since Mum got sick. Mei rinsed the dishes and Satsuki put them away because Mei was too short to reach the cupboards, even on tip toes. "One day I will put the dishes away and YOU will rinse them!" Mei accused. "It's true, Mei" Satsuki teased. "But I will always be older".
During the day Satsuki attended school and when Dad worked at the University in the town Granny would keep Mei company. Mei loved Granny but she missed her old friends. At her play school she had cared for a pet goldfish with her best friend Masumi, and gazing into the pond at the back of their new garden one afternoon she watched tadpoles swim circles blindly through the murk, and she wondered how the fish was doing. She wondered if Masumi remembered to only feed him once a day and she hoped that he hadn't grown too fat.
Mei's train of thought was broken as a handful of hard stones dropped into the pond. She jumped with fright and stuck her fist into the water, feeling around for the stones. Mei could only just reach the shallowest edge of the pond floor, but leaning as far as she could, holding onto the long grass behind her to keep from falling in, she could touch the deep middle where the stones had rolled to, and grabbing one tight she yanked herself back up. "It's an acorn!" she realised, bemused, and looking up to see where they fell from she saw another handful hurtling towards her. They struck her one by one in the face, each bouncing into the water next to her with a hollow splash. It hurt. Sore and embarrassed, Mei wanted to cry, but her curiosity kept her calm.
Mei looked to the tree above her where leaves were rustling and saw what seemed to be an animals paws curled softly around the lowest branch. "Hey you!" Mei shouted. The creature startled and two pointy ears pricked up through the leaves, followed then by two bright yellow eyes shining like headlights onto Mei.
It was a cat.
It was chewing an acorn. It's teeth snapping and sliding like a nut cracker. "Cat's don't eat acorns" Mei announced brazenly. The cat grinned and jumped down stealthily next to Mei, it's paddy paws hitting the tall grass with four thuds. The cat purred and smiled at Mei with a knowing look that shut her up. Mei feared the cat for a moment, but it's purrs grew louder and she felt safe with the animal. In fact she was becoming enamored with it.
Mei threw herself toward the cat and wrapped her arms around it. "I'm so glad to meet you!" she cried, "I've been so bored! Dad is always working and Satsuki goes to class. Will you play with me, cat? Granny is too old!". The cat's fur began to part and its skin started to change shape, moulded like fleshy dough. Its skin opened like a door to reveal cushiony fur seats inside the cats body. Windows popped open down the side of the cats ribcage and Mei shrieked with joy. "I have heard about you! The cat that is like a school bus! Nekobasu!" The cat meowed to Mei and pointed its tail to its door, ushering her in. Mei climbed inside the cat and ran her hand along its fur interior. It was now filled with rows of living seats, moving up and down with each breath the cat took. The door sealed behind her, growing back its skin, leaving no trace that it had been there at all. "Dad read me stories about you".
Mei and the catbus drove together across the countryside whenever she felt lonely. Mei sat up front looking through the window in its chest, laughing as they leapt through fields and across rivers. The cat climbed the tallest trees and often they'd spend entire days in the canopies, watching over the village and taking naps when the sun grew too hot. The nekobasu even took her to visit her mother. Though she couldn't go inside she left gifts for her. She tied corn and other vegetables from their garden in bows of string and put them on the windowsill of her room. She sat with the cat and watched her mother discover them. Mei cried silently when her mother read the notes she'd etched in the corn with a rock. She wanted to hug her more than anything in the world, but instead she hugged the cat.
Lydia's Final - Brave Girl
In Gone with the wind Rhett loves Scarlett and married her when she was actually in love with another married man. They had a child but died when she was only five. After many misunderstanding and misreading of messages between each other, Rhett decided to leave Scarlett. However, Scarlett only found she had loved Rhett for a long time which she didn’t realize until he left her.
The sequal Scarlett continues the story by telling Scarlett was trying to get Rhett back and even had another baby to him. However, without knowing the existence of the new baby, Rhett refused the reunion and officially divorced Scarlett although he was still very much in love with her. Scarlett went to Ireland after the divorce and built her own town Ballyhara and secretly raised their daughter named Cat.
My fanfic is about the first time that Rhett meets his daughter when she was four. Is he going to find out? What is he going to do after? Welcome to the world of never ending Gone with the wind.
No one would believe that Ballyhara was an abandoned town with nettles on its land and burnt down houses all over the place.
“She rebuilt the town with her own hand, wasn’t she amazing?” Bart Morland couldn’t hide his admiration for Scarlett. On the main street of Ballyhara, Rhett’s eyes ironed through the town. New houses were standing along the main street. It was quiet as all the people were out working in the farm land. He could image the hard time that Scarlett had been through. He always wondered if she was happy and what she was doing. Bart told him that people call her the O’Hara and show great respect to her. He knew in his heart that she was no longer that Clayton girl. He still remembered that he had tried so hard to divorce her in order to make her regret left Charlston. However, he was the one who regretted every day after the divorce. He chose to have his new life in Charleston, he married to another woman and they will have a baby of their own. All he wanted to know was that she was happy without him, so he could relief and carry on with his future.
“Changeling, changeling.”… “Get away from us.” … “Hey, you’d better run faster, changeling.” a group of children were yelling and running after a little girl. The girl was running as fast as she could and evading the stones that were thrown to her. She was so small and swift. It seemed that she knew how to escape from those who are older than her definitely. Her little face showed no fear and no angry either. Rhett was so surprised with her face. There was no reason why his heart started beating so rapidly. He felt his blood had been pressured into his head which made him wanted to hold this little body in his arms and protect her. He rode towards the boys and scared them away. The girl stopped and raised her face which was rose colored after the run and her eyes directly looked into his. There was a strange feeling that this girl so much looks like … him…
“My name is Cat, what is your name?” Cat asked. “My name is Rhett” Rhett got off the horse and answered earnestly. “Is he your friend?” Cat looked at Bart. “Yes, would you like me to ride you home?” Rhett asked carefully. He was very interested in this little girl. She was so confident and brave. He wanted to know how her parents look like. “No thank you, I don’t want to go home now. You can ride me to my tower. It’s not too far from here.” Rhett smiled and lifted her up onto the horse.
The only access to the tower was through an old rope ladder. Cat climbed up the ladder as fast as a monkey. She also invited Rhett and Bart to come into her tower. However Bart was not so good with children, he rather stays with his horse which he was more familiar with. He had never seen anyone like Rhett who was so fascinated with child, he would be worse with his own child.
“That’s my home.” Cat pointed to a big house which was away from other houses in the town. Its size was big enough to tell that the owner of the house was the owner of the town. “Scarlett, Scarlett is the owner of the town” Rhett mumbled. Whose child should Cat be? “I don’t think Mrs Fitz likes to give chocolate cakes to strangers. If mum is home, she will let my friends in for sure.” Rhett didn’t hear what she said. His brain is busy with searching answers to his questions. “Who is your Mum Cat? Where is she?” He asked and didn’t realize that his voice was stiffened. He never lost his temper, especially in front of a little girl. He could hold himself under restraint. What happened to him this time? He then tried to come back to the true himself and softened his questions. Cat was a clever girl. She seemed noticed the change on Rhett’s face and his voice. “Mum is mum, she is in Dublin.” Then she refused to talk more about her mum. She felt like going home.
On Rhett’s horse, Cat was quiet. She showed Rhett the way to her home. She did like Rhett, but not when he had too many questions. She felt close to him although they had only been together for a little while. She believed that they could become good friends.
“I need to find out. I will find out whose child Cat is. Yes, Scarlett, didn’t Cat say she is in Dublin? Bart told me she even takes Dublin Castle by storm during the Castle season. I will find out from her. She has to tell me the truth.” Rhett contemplated.
Rhett couldn’t keep his eye sight away from Cat until she disappeared into a small door. Cat always goes out through this secret door without letting anyone know when mum is away. “Is she my daughter? Her age is as same as the time Scarlett and I have been separated for. Scarlett wouldn’t have a baby to another man just after left me. Would she?” All the speculation showed that Cat was his daughter. Rhett urged the horse. He needed to get to the nearest train station. He was on his way to Dublin.
Friday, August 13, 2010
Kevin's Fanfiction [FINAL]
Bioshock - Journal of Eugene Riley
August 3rd, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Poor Eileen... only five years old, she doesn't understand why we must leave Limerick. It breaks my heart to see her in sorrow, if there was only another way to show her the hardships of this land, another way for her to see the opportunities that await us in America, another way to forget... forget the pain. It hasn't been easy for Eileen since her mother had passed, it hasn't been easy for any of us. That is why we must leave, the airplane is waiting. Watch over us Deborah, our daughter will soon smile again.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Water and fire... the only living and breathing matter left alive. The airplane had met it's fate over the mid-Atlantic, there were no other survivors, Eileen and I had been forsaken. In the place of blessing and fortune I felt only desolation and despair... and then it emerged. Veiled under a facade of smoke, enveloped by the shattered skeleton of our airplane; a lighthouse in the ocean - our only salvation.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #2 by Eugene Riley,
Abandoned, we had stumbled upon the derelict remains of a lighthouse. Ushered in by a tall iron gate we were greeted only by darkness and cold. It appeared that no soul had stepped within these walls for a decade... and then light. "No gods or kings. Only man." a banner illuminated against the shadow. This was no conventional lighthouse, no staircase, no carrier was present to guide you to the crown of the monument. Instead there was a way down... down was the only way to proceed and so down we proceeded. More lights kindled the hallways as we descended and there it was, the machine that would breach a gateway into the ocean. I took Eileen by her hand and watched as the bathysphere took us into the abyss.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #3 by Eugene Riley,
Bright like treasure to a pirate's eyes, this was truly the jewel of the sea. I have seen many marvels of the world but none could rival the grandeur my eyes had sighted. A city... a metropolis beneath the ocean. Towers erected from the sea floor, alleyways traversed by marine creatures and lights... lights that acquaint to the beauty of Broadway. Could this be the city I had been in search of in my dreams? Had we arrived in New York? No... we've arrived somewhere far beyond my imagination. I've made it Deborah... we've made it.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #4 by Eugene Riley,
"Welcome to Rapture", under the guise of perfection lay the bones of affliction. Rapture as we'd come to discover was now a faint reminder or its once former glory. It's walls ravaged with the aftermath of desecration. There were no inhabitants, at least... none alive. A ghost city, the echo of water dripping through these vast halls offer a grim reminder of my seclusion... our seclusion. Poor Eileen, if she could only feel my sorrow for her now. "We're going to get through this" I said to her, "Daddy will always be here for you... always".
August 6th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Resting has been difficult, under the veil of the ocean it has become impossible to decipher the cycle of night and day. However we must press on, a city of this magnitude surely must offer a method of communication to the surface, it is our only hope now.
August 9th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
The guise of sanctuary has many faces, after what seems to have been an eternity of searching I'd found it... a voice. A song from the shadows had crept through the depths to divert my senses. "Hello there!" I yell. No answer, the voice had disappeared. "Please I have a child, I need your help!", still no answer... and then, a silhouette. Revealing itself from the darkness, an arm and then a foot, a chest and then... a face. A terrifying visage, disfigured... no, mutilated. She spoke only sparsely; "No.. not your child... this little one is a child of rapture now..." and then with demonic haste she fled, fled with Eileen clutched in the devil's grip. I caught only one last glimpse of Eileen's grievous eyes before she became one with the shade. I'd lost her Deborah.
August 13th, 1959
Exhaustion had deprived me of my senses. This decaying world has left me bewildered, a labyrinth of ruin. Eileen is here, I cannot leave without her. Only the thought of her empowers me to proceed further, deeper into the midst of hell. Sometimes I still hear her voice. Eileen... I'll always be there for you... always.
August unknown, 1959
Several days have passed, perhaps weeks, time has drifted from my consciousness. Voices and footsteps are always around me, always nearing me. The sound of children encompass me, little sisters cheerful and playing. But when I approach, they are never there.
unknown, 1959
Madness has devoured my soul, I can no longer clarify the visions I have laid my eyes upon. She was there... a little girl, turning to face me as I approached. Eileen? No... it can't have been, this was not the Eileen I had treasured in my thoughts, this girl had been twisted and broken. The next word I could not rationalise between fantasy and insanity; "...Daddy?", and then a howl, followed by swift judgement. Something else was there, lurking among the shadow. I've been discovered, I must escape.
unknown entry date
last known entry of Eugene Riley
They know and they are always watching. I can hear their voices, echos from the deep... they're coming. What have they done to her Deborah? I told her we'd get through this... I lied. Poor Eileen... only five years old.
Zacs Final Fanfic
My fanfic is set roughly 20 years after the end of the first Monsters Inc movie. It is from Sulleys POV and contains mainly dialogue between him and Mike, as well as his thoughts on their conversation. both following and preceding Mikes dialogue.
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Mike wore a very serious and worried expression on his face as he walked into my office. He slowly sat himself down in the chair opposite my desk, but before I got a chance to ask what was wrong he looked straight at me, and let out a long deep sigh.
“It’s getting worse every day Sulley. People are cutting way back on their power usage and there are still blackouts all over the grid. The kids just aren’t laughing enough anymore. We can’t come up with anything original to make them laugh, once they've seen it a hundred times it just stops being funny.”
I know he is right but what can I do about it? I've been thinking about it morning and night for the past week and come up with nothing. Just because I have CEO next to my name on the door doesn't mean I have all the answers.
“Yes, but Mike, what can we do? You can’t force a laugh out of someone, it just doesn’t work that way.”
“We are monsters Sulley. Not clowns. What are monsters good at? Being scary. You know it’s the only way forward Sulley. There isn’t enough power to manufacture anything in the factories. Food is running low all over the city, Monstropolis is suffering.”
He knows I don’t like the idea one bit but he is suggesting it anyway, there are other ways though. I should tell him my idea, but he won't like it, I can almost hear his thoughts ready to say no to whatever I suggest.
“Why don’t we branch out into a new market Mike? There are human adults out there, not just children. We can make them laugh. We could even do special shows in front of thousands and convince them we are humans wearing costumes as part of the comedy show, they will never know. It will be brilliant.”
I know exactly what he is going to say because it’s the same thing I would say. Adults are smarter, they will find out about us, they will come through a door.
“Sulley.. You’re not serious are you? The adults are much more intelligent than the children. One of them will find out, all it takes is one. They will send people through a door into our city, and I don’t even want to imagine what will happen then, it’s to horrific.”
“It’s worth a try isn’t it? We can take precautions to make sure a human doesn’t get through. Humans aren’t toxic you know. You do remember Boo don’t you Mike?”
“We have to go back to scaring Sulley. It’s the only hope we have. A new generation has come through so most of the children we visit these days have never been scared by a monster. The screams will be so powerful the city will be back to full power reserve in a day, two at the most. That will give us a bit of time to think about what direction we are going to head in. You know deep down it’s the only way Sulley.”
He’s right. And I know he’s right. That’s the worst part. It’s the necessary course of action to keep Monstropolis and its monsters safe and well, but I swore to myself as long as I was CEO the company would never go back into the scaring business again.
“Mike, who is going to scare? All the new monsters have never been taught how. We taught them how to make children laugh. It takes two years of training and another year of work experience to get good at it. You and me both know that’s time we don’t have. Even if I agreed with the scare idea, it can’t be done.”
And just like that I realised what he was thinking. He can’t be serious. He knows how I feel. He is my best friend, a friend would never ask for something like that.
“Sulley. You were the best scarer Monstropolis has ever seen. You won the Scareathon 7 years in a row. The closest anybody came to that was Randall who won three, but that was before you started scaring, and everyone knows he cheated anyway.”
So not only does he want to start the scaring business again which he knows I am against, he wants me to do the scaring which I am even stronger opposed to. But what can I say. If I say no I may as well destroy Monstropolis myself.
"Imagine if every kid you scare was Boo, or Boo's kids. Would you still do it Mike? The look on their face when they wake up to us is terrible, it gives me nightmares, how can you ignore that? How do you sleep knowing so many children can't because they are terrified, and we are the cause of it.
He can't be that cold hearted. I must have got to him, on some level at least.
"But Sulley, every kid isn't Boo, all we do is scare them and prevent the possibility of the destruction of Monstropolis, is that really so bad? In the end it's your decision Sulley, whatever you choose the city will obey, but you have to pick the thing best for us, not the best thing for human children.
I don't know what to say. For the first time in my life I am at a loss for words, he is looking straight at me, not staring, just questioning, waiting for an answer as if hoping I will have the solution. But I don't all I can do is look straight back and hope he realises this time I don't have the answer, and this time I won't give in to his solution because his solution goes against everything I believe in.
Thursday, August 12, 2010
THE ADVENTURES OF BARTMAN!!! (Nathan's Final)
THE ADVENTURES OF BARTMAN!!!
Chief Clancy Wiggum, Lou and Eddie are out on patrol on a dark and gloomy night in Springfield. Wiggum has cravings for the new Double Krusty Burger.
Wiggum orders “I’ll have two Krusty Double Burger’s with Cheese, fries and a litre of cola.”Only to find static on the speakers at the drive thru.
He repeats this several times before accidently discharging his weapon and shooting Lou in the foot. On closer inspection the Krusty Burger joint is empty, not an employee or customer in sight. In pain, Lou needs ice for his wound. So Chief Wiggum being the hero he is climbs in through the drive thru window, after struggling up on Eddie’s shoulders, gets stuck in the window before falling through and bouncing on the vinyl floor. He then looks up to see Krusty’s monkey, Bubbles, tied up under the counter with a banana jammed in his mouth and a note scribbled in ketchup on the floor.
As the note comes into focus, Sideshow Bob’s voice begins to read... “The Laughter has been turned to tears, the clown is gone, so you must fear, he will not be returning from his isle of grease. Don’t track me down or you’ll end up in piece...s.... SB”
Wiggum onto it in a flash, books tickets to Greece. All the while Eddie and the monkey are bandaging Lou’s foot.
The scene cuts to Krusty being tormented over a pit of Krusty Burgers. The shot zooms out to show that Krusty is not in Greece but in fact in the newest establishment in the Krusty Burger Chain...”Krusty Burger Alcatraz”
Scene cuts again to Wiggum, Lou, Eddie and the monkey hopping off a plane in the Greek islands to begin searching the local night club life to find Krusty. Fades out when Wiggum takes off his Blue Police shirt, waving it around his head and dancing.
Krusty is in trouble....Barney wanders into Krusty Burger Springfield after a night out at Moe’s. He sees the note and immediately signals for help.
The Krusty doll next to Bart’s bed starts to flash calling Bartman to action. He leaps out of his bed in his pyjamas, climbs across to the tree house and slides down the tree to the Bartcave (nothing more than a hollow in the tree with a shiny green skateboard). He puts on the tight purple and grey outfit and jumps on the skateboard, skating off into the distance.
Barmarnt pulls up to a stop at the Van Houtens’ house. Milhouse is fast asleep in bed, cuddling his Malibu Stacey. Bartman taps on the window. Milhouse stirs and puts on his glasses to see Bartman silhouetted against the moon. Instantaneously Milhouse jumps to action, slips on his outfit, jumps out the window, uncovers a red bicycle (with training wheels) and joins Bartman.
Cuts back to Wiggum dancing the night away. Lou pipes up from across the bar “Ahhh Chief, I don’t think Krusty is in Greece, the monkey tells me he is afraid to fly” pointing to Bubbles who has had far too many Banana coladas.
Sometime later.....
Bartman and Milhouse pull up to a rickety old wharf in stormy weather to find the Sea Captain operating the ferry to Alcatraz. “Gharrrr, where you be heading me matey’s??” Bartman points to the island in the distance. Milhouse begins shaking, begging to go back to Springfield. Bartman exclaims there is no way Sideshow Bob can take away his hero. They set off on the boat across the stormy seas.
When they dock on the island they see a flashlight coming down to meet them. It is night patrolman Flanders “Hideli Hodeli Caped Crusaderino”... Flanders then explains how since the passing of Maud he has had to take on extra work to cover Todd and Rod’s tuition.
Tracking up the dark path, bats flutter past. Mihouse still shaking closely follows Bartman. To their surprise Sideshow Mel (Krusty’s able assistant) jumps out from the bushes flanked by Jimbo, Kearny and Dolph. The school bullies. They attack. Bartman jumps into action. They fight. Bam! Pow! Kapow! The duo overpower their attackers and continue up the path.
They finally arrive at the base of Krusty Burger Alcatraz, and break in through the unlocked basement window. After several scenes showing Bartman and Milhouse searching through storage rooms, behind the counter and in the dining area, they decide to head into the smoking section and up the Krusty Tower. Peering through the key hole they see Sideshow Bob standing over Krusty passed out with the contents of a Krusty Burger next to him on the floor.
They enter the room. Sideshow Bob explains that Krusty has been stealing the jokes of others for many years and he could not take it anymore. Even the new Double Krusty Burger recipe wasn’t Krusty’s own work. Bartman and Sideshow Bob duel, with swords, guns and finally Bartman pulls out his slingshot, and shoots Bob square between the eyes. All the while Milhouse tries to revive Krusty.
Fades to black, then blazing sunshine as Chief Wigam, Lou and Eddie drag Sideshow Bob out of the Krusty tower. Bob steps on a rake, which hits him in the nose. Wigam finally states “Book him Lou”
Fades to Black. Credits roll.
Wednesday, August 4, 2010
Kevin's Fanfiction Reviews
A fan fiction focused on one of the supporting characters of the horror film '28 Days Later'. Begins as a third-person narrative using descriptive language to bring forth the features of the character; Mark, to the audience. Narrated in a sombre tone, Mark runs through the dark setting of the story which is revealed to be a flashback dream sequence as he awakes. The fan fiction continues in first-person as Mark, now in the present, fights for his survival against an infected intruder only to be revealed that Mark himself has now become infected.
Features good use of descriptive language although the story seems fairly rushed, lacking pacing and climatic build-up. Interesting use of third and first-person narratives to separate the flashback and the present. Some spelling and grammatical errors.
3/5
Planet of the Apes - Monkey Business
A first-person narrative based on the setting of the 'Planet of the Apes'. The story is primarily focused on the main character; Professor Cornelius, as he undertakes experiments on test animals leading to the death of the subjects, remaining apathetic on the conditions of such experiments. Cornelius, shown later to be working under the direction of the other main character, Governor Spankin. The plot line of the story is revealed to be an attempt to subdue a rebellion uprising through the use of a giant laser weapon. Upon deploying the weapon a twist is unveiled to the audience that the characters we had been following were in fact the apes themselves.
Although lacking in plot clarity for the majority of story, this fan fiction includes good character development through description and interaction, featuring a very well placed climatic twist.
3.5/5
American Pie - Let's Make A Little Bet
A story following one of the principal characters of the 'American Pie' series; Steve Stifler, who is commonly referred to as just 'Stifler', as he goes on an adventure in search of women. Other main characters include Stifler's friends; Jim, Kevin and Finch. The scene opens with Stifler; a rude, obnoxious male with his counterpart Finch; a calm and methodical person, as Stifler tries his luck in attracting a girl he meets. This nameless woman would later return as a supporting character of which the main plot is based upon.
This fan fiction features accurate portrayals of the characters, staying true to the tone set by the original series. The story itself does not flow very well, the scenes tend to change without warning to the reader. Needs work on correcting spelling and grammatical errors.
2/5
Alvin and the Chipmunks - Dave, You Lost Your Voice
A fan fiction about Dave, an enthusiastic chipmunk with a talent and love for singing, one of the chipmunk characters featured in 'Alvin and the Chipmunks'. Featured alongside his other singing chipmunk companions; Dave finishes up a concert for the night with an astonishing cover of Corinne Baileys Rae's 'Put your records on'. After a night of continual singing practice the plot's staggering climax is unveiled as Dave loses his voice during a performance of Katy Perry's Hot N Cold. The tension builds as the chipmunks rush to Dave's aid. After an extensive analysis of Dave's esophageal structure the Doctor revealed that Dave in fact has a sore throat. Over the next week Dave begins a battle for his life, eventually making a miraculous recovery against all odds.
An inspiring tale of passion and loyalty that will keep you on the edge of your seat, guaranteeing you will never look at chipmunks the same way again.
6/5
Sex and the City - Blinded
A fan fiction narrated in third-person about Carrie, based on the events of the first 'Sex and the City' movie. Carrie's long time partner and love interest; Big, had abruptly abandoned her on their wedding day leaving Carrie in distress as she battles her emotions. The narrative gives a clear insight into the inner thoughts of Carrie as she continues to live her life, moving into the future trying to forget the past.
An extremely well written piece of literature exploring the themes of love and pain. The author does well in developing Carrie as the qualities of her character really shine through to the reader. A thought provoking read that is overshadowed only by it's minor spelling errors.
4.5/5
Ghostbusters - Slime can cause very sad things to happen
A fan fiction following the character of 'Ray', a rage induced ghostbuster bent on unleashing his anger. The story revolves around a blob of slime which had attached itself to Ray after being attracted by his strong emotions. This causes Ray to enter a heightened sense of anger as he unleashes his rage in a spurt of violence towards a friend trying to help. After nearly beating his friend to death he has a moment of realisation.
Quite a violent story with good descriptive language to illustrate the brutality. However the plot itself will leave you a bit confused as the author seems to move through the narrative fairly quickly without offering any explanations. A fan fiction which raises more questions than it answers.
3/5
Hannah Montana - It's not over
This fan fiction follows the character 'Jake' in first-person as he looks back on his past. Throughout the story we are taken on an emotional journey, vividly gaining an insight into Jake's mind as it goes through an internal conflict. Reminiscing on the relationship he had with Miley, Jake is lavished with remorse, unable to let go of his past as his actions come back to haunt him.
Overall this piece does an extremely good job of illustrating the internal conflict of the character. It is written in such a way that you feel as though you are there with the central character through his emotional collapse. Very good development of the story as it progresses with my only gripe centered towards the grammatical errors which seemed to tarnish the piece.
3/5
Totally Spies - In Paris
A fan fiction following two characters within the Totally Spies series; Sam and Tim, as they prepare for their vacation to Paris. The story begins with a flashback of the couple giving the reader an insight as to how the story had progressed to its present setting. Through the use of very descriptive language, strong imagery is imposed on the reader as the couple interact intimately, using dialogue to progress character development. As the flashback ends we are brought back to the present time where Sam is preparing to leave for her vacation with Tim. Brief dialogue is shared with supporting characters; Alex and Clover before the narrative concludes.
I applaud the author's use of descriptive language techniques to really force strong imagery, giving the impression that the characters were physically present with the reader. Some spelling mistakes are apparent in this fan fiction however.
3.5/5
Ice Age - Two Hearts into One
An Ice Age fan fiction following two possums; Crash and Eddie as they adventure through the woods. The two brothers are initially very similar, though as the characters develop we are easily able to see the differences between them. Eddie is a rather cowardly possum who thinks very deeply contrasted by his brother Crash who is very daring but often foolish. The narrative gives insight into Eddie's thoughts, especially those concerning Crash and their differences. Crash eventually confronts Eddie about his thoughts, however Eddie dismisses him and they continue playing.
The author makes very good use dialogue to really develop the differences between what would be two very similar characters. Eddie's monologue gives the reader a deeper view of the character, further adding to his development as a character. Good use of personification is also present however the story really lacks in spelling and grammar, this point alone really tarnished what could have been a very well polished piece.
2/5
Pirates of the Caribbean - When I Find the Ocean
Jack Sparrow features predominantly in this Pirates of the Caribbean fan fiction, set after the events of the final movie in the trilogy. Believing to be free at last to wander the seas with his beloved ship; the Black Pearl, Jack accompanied by his first mate 'Gibbs' discover that they have been tracked by another ship, a pirate ship. Jack makes a bold gamble to turn the Black Pearl around in order to confront this new threat. Allowing the opposing ship's captain to board Jack and this mysterious new character face off before the revealing herself to be the sister of Elizebeth Swann, a prominent character of the original series.
Among one of most well written fan fictions I have come across, the author does an amazing job of bringing forth the life of each character, staying very true to the source material. The dialogue is convincing and polished, allowing the reader to feel the refinement of each word. The plot development was well received, tension build up was present leading to a very rewarding climax.
4.5/5
Sunday, August 1, 2010
Rosa Fanfiction Review
This fan-fiction basically is for fairies who lived in Pixie Hollow and this is the secret heart of Never Land. All fairies lived in the old maple tree grown in Pixie Hollow and in this house there live hundreds of fairies and sparrow men. Tinker Bell is a fairy who have a talent for making pots and these pots fairies in Pixie Hollow used it for their cooking. Actually all fairies in the Pixie Hollow each one of them have their own talents. In this fanfic is about the new fairy arrived in Pixie Hollow and the queen told all fairies to welcome the new fairy to the family. Tinker Bell is a very friendly fairy in the whole place in Pixie Hollow. She always help out her friends when they need any kind of help. The writer of this fanfiction of Tinker Bell random the whole story in the way that children will like to read more about Tinker Bell the fairy who lived in Pixie Hollow with lots of fairies and their queen.
Tinker Bell and the lost treasure
This fanfic is very happy ending when this poor little girl want to play outside with the rain. However in the land she lived is always sunny and she think that having sun everyday are not much fun. One day she stood next to her window and dreaming about having a rain instead of sun. She also want to own a cloud and this can make her easier to control the cloud to get raining if she want it any time she needs it. After that she fall asleep and she woke up in the morning her friend Dizzy already soaking wet. She thought her friend just come from the beach, however, Dizzy told her that she actually had a lovely time in the rain outside. Rani didn't know that she actually asked for this to happen that she is going to have and control the cloud. So where ever she went the cloud follow and the poor land actually raining all days. All fairies are so angry and disappointed that they not able to finish their works because they don't have more sun but the every day in Pixie Hollow always. Tinker Bell found her friend outside and they want to go and looked for the lost treasure. This treasure is the most important in the life of fairies in Pixie Hollow. What a found in the story is not exactly Tinker Bell who looked for the lost treasure as the writer of the fan-fiction wrote about, however in the story of the Tinker Bell, it was Rida who was looking for the lost treasure.
Vidia and the Fairy Crown
This fanfic is about the two fairies name Beck and Rosetta. Vidia is basically be banned from the place of fairies because she actually stole some feather from the Mother Dove and attached to herself to make her fly faster and she got punished from this for what she did. What happen when all fairies got busy with there works and duties and after that the Crown had been stolen from the queen closet. The fairy who discovered this went and told the queen of what was happen to the crown. The queen called the meeting agented and everybody come and they quite shocked what is this meeting are about. When everybody arrived the queen told them the party has been cancel. Everybody murmured and whispered a each other without any words. The queen made an announcement that the crown had been lost from the closet. Everybody turned t Vidia because they believed that she is the one she possible stole the crown. After that Vidia made a decision that she is going to do a private investigation for the lost crown to proved the queen and all he fairies in the Pixie Hollow she didn't took it.
Fawn and the chipmunk
Snow White
Snow White and the Seven Dwarf Cousins
This fanfic is about the seven dwarf cousins are quite happy that their cousins are able to visit them. Seven Dwarf normally go to the mine to collected gold from the morning until night. However the day they actually went to the mine to collected gold and they want to come home early to prepared everything for their coming guests. When the seven dwarf came home they are really tired and no one want to do anything. Few minutes later the girl appeared from somewhere that the dwarf didn't know where is this beautiful girl come from. After the girl arrived she called out her friends to come and help out to clean the whole house for guests they will arrived soon. What I think about this fanfic is well prepared and and also the writer are more familiar with the story of Snow White very well.
This fanfic is about the the girl who actually still about the stepmother try to killed her step-daughter because when ever she asked the mirror and the mirror told her that Snow White is the prettiest girl on the world. The stepmother got angry and she want to poison her. She bought a nicest and fine apple and put some poison in it and there she went to look for Snow White. She found her and turn herself to an old poor woman and she asked her if she want to buy an apple. Snow White felt sorry for her and she bought the apple and she took a huge bite and there she got poison from the apple from the witch, however she actually didn't know that the apple is already been poison from her stepmother.
Happy Ever After
This fanfic is the end of the story when Snow White died and the poor 7 brothers of her felt so sad and disappointed for what was happen to their sister. However while these brothers sad around the coffin and finally the handsome guy came along on the horse. He asked the 7 brothers what happen to their sister. The dwarf told him that their sister died because she been poison by someone. The prince hopped off from his horse and he went straight to the coffin and he bend down and kissed the beautiful girl in the coffin. Finally Snow White awaken and the prince took her to his palace and getting married afterward.