In Gone with the wind Rhett loves Scarlett and married her when she was actually in love with another married man. They had a child but died when she was only five. After many misunderstanding and misreading of messages between each other, Rhett decided to leave Scarlett. However, Scarlett only found she had loved Rhett for a long time which she didn’t realize until he left her.
The sequal Scarlett continues the story by telling Scarlett was trying to get Rhett back and even had another baby to him. However, without knowing the existence of the new baby, Rhett refused the reunion and officially divorced Scarlett although he was still very much in love with her. Scarlett went to Ireland after the divorce and built her own town Ballyhara and secretly raised their daughter named Cat.
My fanfic is about the first time that Rhett meets his daughter when she was four. Is he going to find out? What is he going to do after? Welcome to the world of never ending Gone with the wind.
No one would believe that Ballyhara was an abandoned town with nettles on its land and burnt down houses all over the place.
“She rebuilt the town with her own hand, wasn’t she amazing?” Bart Morland couldn’t hide his admiration for Scarlett. On the main street of Ballyhara, Rhett’s eyes ironed through the town. New houses were standing along the main street. It was quiet as all the people were out working in the farm land. He could image the hard time that Scarlett had been through. He always wondered if she was happy and what she was doing. Bart told him that people call her the O’Hara and show great respect to her. He knew in his heart that she was no longer that Clayton girl. He still remembered that he had tried so hard to divorce her in order to make her regret left Charlston. However, he was the one who regretted every day after the divorce. He chose to have his new life in Charleston, he married to another woman and they will have a baby of their own. All he wanted to know was that she was happy without him, so he could relief and carry on with his future.
“Changeling, changeling.”… “Get away from us.” … “Hey, you’d better run faster, changeling.” a group of children were yelling and running after a little girl. The girl was running as fast as she could and evading the stones that were thrown to her. She was so small and swift. It seemed that she knew how to escape from those who are older than her definitely. Her little face showed no fear and no angry either. Rhett was so surprised with her face. There was no reason why his heart started beating so rapidly. He felt his blood had been pressured into his head which made him wanted to hold this little body in his arms and protect her. He rode towards the boys and scared them away. The girl stopped and raised her face which was rose colored after the run and her eyes directly looked into his. There was a strange feeling that this girl so much looks like … him…
“My name is Cat, what is your name?” Cat asked. “My name is Rhett” Rhett got off the horse and answered earnestly. “Is he your friend?” Cat looked at Bart. “Yes, would you like me to ride you home?” Rhett asked carefully. He was very interested in this little girl. She was so confident and brave. He wanted to know how her parents look like. “No thank you, I don’t want to go home now. You can ride me to my tower. It’s not too far from here.” Rhett smiled and lifted her up onto the horse.
The only access to the tower was through an old rope ladder. Cat climbed up the ladder as fast as a monkey. She also invited Rhett and Bart to come into her tower. However Bart was not so good with children, he rather stays with his horse which he was more familiar with. He had never seen anyone like Rhett who was so fascinated with child, he would be worse with his own child.
“That’s my home.” Cat pointed to a big house which was away from other houses in the town. Its size was big enough to tell that the owner of the house was the owner of the town. “Scarlett, Scarlett is the owner of the town” Rhett mumbled. Whose child should Cat be? “I don’t think Mrs Fitz likes to give chocolate cakes to strangers. If mum is home, she will let my friends in for sure.” Rhett didn’t hear what she said. His brain is busy with searching answers to his questions. “Who is your Mum Cat? Where is she?” He asked and didn’t realize that his voice was stiffened. He never lost his temper, especially in front of a little girl. He could hold himself under restraint. What happened to him this time? He then tried to come back to the true himself and softened his questions. Cat was a clever girl. She seemed noticed the change on Rhett’s face and his voice. “Mum is mum, she is in Dublin.” Then she refused to talk more about her mum. She felt like going home.
On Rhett’s horse, Cat was quiet. She showed Rhett the way to her home. She did like Rhett, but not when he had too many questions. She felt close to him although they had only been together for a little while. She believed that they could become good friends.
“I need to find out. I will find out whose child Cat is. Yes, Scarlett, didn’t Cat say she is in Dublin? Bart told me she even takes Dublin Castle by storm during the Castle season. I will find out from her. She has to tell me the truth.” Rhett contemplated.
Rhett couldn’t keep his eye sight away from Cat until she disappeared into a small door. Cat always goes out through this secret door without letting anyone know when mum is away. “Is she my daughter? Her age is as same as the time Scarlett and I have been separated for. Scarlett wouldn’t have a baby to another man just after left me. Would she?” All the speculation showed that Cat was his daughter. Rhett urged the horse. He needed to get to the nearest train station. He was on his way to Dublin.
Dear group members. Thank you for your valuable comments. I really appreciate your help. I had proof read a few times after read your comments. I tried to adjust my sentence structures and correct some grammer mistakes. I hope it is better this time.
ReplyDeleteI can see you've made a good effort to improve upon your last draft Lydia, overall the spelling is fine however there are still quite a lot of grammatical errors. The main gripe I have with this piece is the general sentence structure that carries out throughout the narrative:
ReplyDeleteThere was something I noticed. It has to do with the majority of your sentences. They tend to be very short and abrubt. You seem to cut your sentences off a lot. Kind of like this.
I personally believe if you took more time developing each sentence your fanfiction would improve a lot overall.
Good effort on your final piece of fanfiction Lydia. You have made clear improvements from your initial drafts making ‘Brave Girl’ an enjoyable read. There are only a few grammatical errors throughout your final work but it is evident grammar and sentence structure has improved since the completion of your first drafts.
ReplyDeleteYour story has a clear plot and a good description of the characters used, mainly Cat and Rhett. As I was originally unfamiliar with what your fanfic was based on, you have made the story and background more clear with your descriptive writing and use of dialogue having helped set the plot, scene and characters.
The ending of your writing is very effective for your story. You have left the reader hanging, curious and wanting to know what will happen next in this story. This creative ending has set the scene for another adventure with Rhett on his way to Dublin. Well done.