Saturday, August 14, 2010
Sigrid's Final
A fanfiction based on the film My Neighbour Totoro by Hayao Miyazaki. A children's film in which two girls meet the spirit of the forest, Totoro. This fanfic is focused on a cat that has a bit-part in the film.
Satsuki and Mei's mother was in hospital. Dad had said that she was sick and had to get out of the city to get better. Satsuki and Mei didn't complain when they moved house, even though it tired them putting all the stuff in boxes. Hairpins, kimonos and other trinkets reminded them of their mother and made Satsuki's eyes fill with tears, but she put on a brave face for Mei and wiped them away. They were moving closer to the hospital in the country. Their new house was only a two mile cycle away.
Their house was unmistakable. Shrouded in overgrown vines and hidden under avalanches of cherry blossom, Satsuki was thrown by it's character. "If Dad was a house this is what he'd look like. It must be a thousand years old! " she thought to herself. The pillars were falling down, their weathered paint and rotted wood decayed from its years uninhabited. The grass in its fields had become so overgrown all of Mei but the bow in her hair disappeared into it. "SATSUKI! SATSUKI! There is so much gardening to do!" she yelled, darting in and out of the bushes, picking up acorns and throwing them back onto the ground.
It didn't take long for Mei, Satsuki and Dad to make the new house a home. Granny, who lived in the next field over, helped with the chores and Dad steamed rice every night. He was getting better at cooking since Mum got sick. Mei rinsed the dishes and Satsuki put them away because Mei was too short to reach the cupboards, even on tip toes. "One day I will put the dishes away and YOU will rinse them!" Mei accused. "It's true, Mei" Satsuki teased. "But I will always be older".
During the day Satsuki attended school and when Dad worked at the University in the town Granny would keep Mei company. Mei loved Granny but she missed her old friends. At her play school she had cared for a pet goldfish with her best friend Masumi, and gazing into the pond at the back of their new garden one afternoon she watched tadpoles swim circles blindly through the murk, and she wondered how the fish was doing. She wondered if Masumi remembered to only feed him once a day and she hoped that he hadn't grown too fat.
Mei's train of thought was broken as a handful of hard stones dropped into the pond. She jumped with fright and stuck her fist into the water, feeling around for the stones. Mei could only just reach the shallowest edge of the pond floor, but leaning as far as she could, holding onto the long grass behind her to keep from falling in, she could touch the deep middle where the stones had rolled to, and grabbing one tight she yanked herself back up. "It's an acorn!" she realised, bemused, and looking up to see where they fell from she saw another handful hurtling towards her. They struck her one by one in the face, each bouncing into the water next to her with a hollow splash. It hurt. Sore and embarrassed, Mei wanted to cry, but her curiosity kept her calm.
Mei looked to the tree above her where leaves were rustling and saw what seemed to be an animals paws curled softly around the lowest branch. "Hey you!" Mei shouted. The creature startled and two pointy ears pricked up through the leaves, followed then by two bright yellow eyes shining like headlights onto Mei.
It was a cat.
It was chewing an acorn. It's teeth snapping and sliding like a nut cracker. "Cat's don't eat acorns" Mei announced brazenly. The cat grinned and jumped down stealthily next to Mei, it's paddy paws hitting the tall grass with four thuds. The cat purred and smiled at Mei with a knowing look that shut her up. Mei feared the cat for a moment, but it's purrs grew louder and she felt safe with the animal. In fact she was becoming enamored with it.
Mei threw herself toward the cat and wrapped her arms around it. "I'm so glad to meet you!" she cried, "I've been so bored! Dad is always working and Satsuki goes to class. Will you play with me, cat? Granny is too old!". The cat's fur began to part and its skin started to change shape, moulded like fleshy dough. Its skin opened like a door to reveal cushiony fur seats inside the cats body. Windows popped open down the side of the cats ribcage and Mei shrieked with joy. "I have heard about you! The cat that is like a school bus! Nekobasu!" The cat meowed to Mei and pointed its tail to its door, ushering her in. Mei climbed inside the cat and ran her hand along its fur interior. It was now filled with rows of living seats, moving up and down with each breath the cat took. The door sealed behind her, growing back its skin, leaving no trace that it had been there at all. "Dad read me stories about you".
Mei and the catbus drove together across the countryside whenever she felt lonely. Mei sat up front looking through the window in its chest, laughing as they leapt through fields and across rivers. The cat climbed the tallest trees and often they'd spend entire days in the canopies, watching over the village and taking naps when the sun grew too hot. The nekobasu even took her to visit her mother. Though she couldn't go inside she left gifts for her. She tied corn and other vegetables from their garden in bows of string and put them on the windowsill of her room. She sat with the cat and watched her mother discover them. Mei cried silently when her mother read the notes she'd etched in the corn with a rock. She wanted to hug her more than anything in the world, but instead she hugged the cat.
Lydia's Final - Brave Girl
In Gone with the wind Rhett loves Scarlett and married her when she was actually in love with another married man. They had a child but died when she was only five. After many misunderstanding and misreading of messages between each other, Rhett decided to leave Scarlett. However, Scarlett only found she had loved Rhett for a long time which she didn’t realize until he left her.
The sequal Scarlett continues the story by telling Scarlett was trying to get Rhett back and even had another baby to him. However, without knowing the existence of the new baby, Rhett refused the reunion and officially divorced Scarlett although he was still very much in love with her. Scarlett went to Ireland after the divorce and built her own town Ballyhara and secretly raised their daughter named Cat.
My fanfic is about the first time that Rhett meets his daughter when she was four. Is he going to find out? What is he going to do after? Welcome to the world of never ending Gone with the wind.
No one would believe that Ballyhara was an abandoned town with nettles on its land and burnt down houses all over the place.
“She rebuilt the town with her own hand, wasn’t she amazing?” Bart Morland couldn’t hide his admiration for Scarlett. On the main street of Ballyhara, Rhett’s eyes ironed through the town. New houses were standing along the main street. It was quiet as all the people were out working in the farm land. He could image the hard time that Scarlett had been through. He always wondered if she was happy and what she was doing. Bart told him that people call her the O’Hara and show great respect to her. He knew in his heart that she was no longer that Clayton girl. He still remembered that he had tried so hard to divorce her in order to make her regret left Charlston. However, he was the one who regretted every day after the divorce. He chose to have his new life in Charleston, he married to another woman and they will have a baby of their own. All he wanted to know was that she was happy without him, so he could relief and carry on with his future.
“Changeling, changeling.”… “Get away from us.” … “Hey, you’d better run faster, changeling.” a group of children were yelling and running after a little girl. The girl was running as fast as she could and evading the stones that were thrown to her. She was so small and swift. It seemed that she knew how to escape from those who are older than her definitely. Her little face showed no fear and no angry either. Rhett was so surprised with her face. There was no reason why his heart started beating so rapidly. He felt his blood had been pressured into his head which made him wanted to hold this little body in his arms and protect her. He rode towards the boys and scared them away. The girl stopped and raised her face which was rose colored after the run and her eyes directly looked into his. There was a strange feeling that this girl so much looks like … him…
“My name is Cat, what is your name?” Cat asked. “My name is Rhett” Rhett got off the horse and answered earnestly. “Is he your friend?” Cat looked at Bart. “Yes, would you like me to ride you home?” Rhett asked carefully. He was very interested in this little girl. She was so confident and brave. He wanted to know how her parents look like. “No thank you, I don’t want to go home now. You can ride me to my tower. It’s not too far from here.” Rhett smiled and lifted her up onto the horse.
The only access to the tower was through an old rope ladder. Cat climbed up the ladder as fast as a monkey. She also invited Rhett and Bart to come into her tower. However Bart was not so good with children, he rather stays with his horse which he was more familiar with. He had never seen anyone like Rhett who was so fascinated with child, he would be worse with his own child.
“That’s my home.” Cat pointed to a big house which was away from other houses in the town. Its size was big enough to tell that the owner of the house was the owner of the town. “Scarlett, Scarlett is the owner of the town” Rhett mumbled. Whose child should Cat be? “I don’t think Mrs Fitz likes to give chocolate cakes to strangers. If mum is home, she will let my friends in for sure.” Rhett didn’t hear what she said. His brain is busy with searching answers to his questions. “Who is your Mum Cat? Where is she?” He asked and didn’t realize that his voice was stiffened. He never lost his temper, especially in front of a little girl. He could hold himself under restraint. What happened to him this time? He then tried to come back to the true himself and softened his questions. Cat was a clever girl. She seemed noticed the change on Rhett’s face and his voice. “Mum is mum, she is in Dublin.” Then she refused to talk more about her mum. She felt like going home.
On Rhett’s horse, Cat was quiet. She showed Rhett the way to her home. She did like Rhett, but not when he had too many questions. She felt close to him although they had only been together for a little while. She believed that they could become good friends.
“I need to find out. I will find out whose child Cat is. Yes, Scarlett, didn’t Cat say she is in Dublin? Bart told me she even takes Dublin Castle by storm during the Castle season. I will find out from her. She has to tell me the truth.” Rhett contemplated.
Rhett couldn’t keep his eye sight away from Cat until she disappeared into a small door. Cat always goes out through this secret door without letting anyone know when mum is away. “Is she my daughter? Her age is as same as the time Scarlett and I have been separated for. Scarlett wouldn’t have a baby to another man just after left me. Would she?” All the speculation showed that Cat was his daughter. Rhett urged the horse. He needed to get to the nearest train station. He was on his way to Dublin.
Friday, August 13, 2010
Kevin's Fanfiction [FINAL]
Bioshock - Journal of Eugene Riley
August 3rd, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Poor Eileen... only five years old, she doesn't understand why we must leave Limerick. It breaks my heart to see her in sorrow, if there was only another way to show her the hardships of this land, another way for her to see the opportunities that await us in America, another way to forget... forget the pain. It hasn't been easy for Eileen since her mother had passed, it hasn't been easy for any of us. That is why we must leave, the airplane is waiting. Watch over us Deborah, our daughter will soon smile again.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Water and fire... the only living and breathing matter left alive. The airplane had met it's fate over the mid-Atlantic, there were no other survivors, Eileen and I had been forsaken. In the place of blessing and fortune I felt only desolation and despair... and then it emerged. Veiled under a facade of smoke, enveloped by the shattered skeleton of our airplane; a lighthouse in the ocean - our only salvation.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #2 by Eugene Riley,
Abandoned, we had stumbled upon the derelict remains of a lighthouse. Ushered in by a tall iron gate we were greeted only by darkness and cold. It appeared that no soul had stepped within these walls for a decade... and then light. "No gods or kings. Only man." a banner illuminated against the shadow. This was no conventional lighthouse, no staircase, no carrier was present to guide you to the crown of the monument. Instead there was a way down... down was the only way to proceed and so down we proceeded. More lights kindled the hallways as we descended and there it was, the machine that would breach a gateway into the ocean. I took Eileen by her hand and watched as the bathysphere took us into the abyss.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #3 by Eugene Riley,
Bright like treasure to a pirate's eyes, this was truly the jewel of the sea. I have seen many marvels of the world but none could rival the grandeur my eyes had sighted. A city... a metropolis beneath the ocean. Towers erected from the sea floor, alleyways traversed by marine creatures and lights... lights that acquaint to the beauty of Broadway. Could this be the city I had been in search of in my dreams? Had we arrived in New York? No... we've arrived somewhere far beyond my imagination. I've made it Deborah... we've made it.
August 4th, 1959
Journal entry #4 by Eugene Riley,
"Welcome to Rapture", under the guise of perfection lay the bones of affliction. Rapture as we'd come to discover was now a faint reminder or its once former glory. It's walls ravaged with the aftermath of desecration. There were no inhabitants, at least... none alive. A ghost city, the echo of water dripping through these vast halls offer a grim reminder of my seclusion... our seclusion. Poor Eileen, if she could only feel my sorrow for her now. "We're going to get through this" I said to her, "Daddy will always be here for you... always".
August 6th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
Resting has been difficult, under the veil of the ocean it has become impossible to decipher the cycle of night and day. However we must press on, a city of this magnitude surely must offer a method of communication to the surface, it is our only hope now.
August 9th, 1959
Journal entry by Eugene Riley,
The guise of sanctuary has many faces, after what seems to have been an eternity of searching I'd found it... a voice. A song from the shadows had crept through the depths to divert my senses. "Hello there!" I yell. No answer, the voice had disappeared. "Please I have a child, I need your help!", still no answer... and then, a silhouette. Revealing itself from the darkness, an arm and then a foot, a chest and then... a face. A terrifying visage, disfigured... no, mutilated. She spoke only sparsely; "No.. not your child... this little one is a child of rapture now..." and then with demonic haste she fled, fled with Eileen clutched in the devil's grip. I caught only one last glimpse of Eileen's grievous eyes before she became one with the shade. I'd lost her Deborah.
August 13th, 1959
Exhaustion had deprived me of my senses. This decaying world has left me bewildered, a labyrinth of ruin. Eileen is here, I cannot leave without her. Only the thought of her empowers me to proceed further, deeper into the midst of hell. Sometimes I still hear her voice. Eileen... I'll always be there for you... always.
August unknown, 1959
Several days have passed, perhaps weeks, time has drifted from my consciousness. Voices and footsteps are always around me, always nearing me. The sound of children encompass me, little sisters cheerful and playing. But when I approach, they are never there.
unknown, 1959
Madness has devoured my soul, I can no longer clarify the visions I have laid my eyes upon. She was there... a little girl, turning to face me as I approached. Eileen? No... it can't have been, this was not the Eileen I had treasured in my thoughts, this girl had been twisted and broken. The next word I could not rationalise between fantasy and insanity; "...Daddy?", and then a howl, followed by swift judgement. Something else was there, lurking among the shadow. I've been discovered, I must escape.
unknown entry date
last known entry of Eugene Riley
They know and they are always watching. I can hear their voices, echos from the deep... they're coming. What have they done to her Deborah? I told her we'd get through this... I lied. Poor Eileen... only five years old.
Zacs Final Fanfic
My fanfic is set roughly 20 years after the end of the first Monsters Inc movie. It is from Sulleys POV and contains mainly dialogue between him and Mike, as well as his thoughts on their conversation. both following and preceding Mikes dialogue.
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Mike wore a very serious and worried expression on his face as he walked into my office. He slowly sat himself down in the chair opposite my desk, but before I got a chance to ask what was wrong he looked straight at me, and let out a long deep sigh.
“It’s getting worse every day Sulley. People are cutting way back on their power usage and there are still blackouts all over the grid. The kids just aren’t laughing enough anymore. We can’t come up with anything original to make them laugh, once they've seen it a hundred times it just stops being funny.”
I know he is right but what can I do about it? I've been thinking about it morning and night for the past week and come up with nothing. Just because I have CEO next to my name on the door doesn't mean I have all the answers.
“Yes, but Mike, what can we do? You can’t force a laugh out of someone, it just doesn’t work that way.”
“We are monsters Sulley. Not clowns. What are monsters good at? Being scary. You know it’s the only way forward Sulley. There isn’t enough power to manufacture anything in the factories. Food is running low all over the city, Monstropolis is suffering.”
He knows I don’t like the idea one bit but he is suggesting it anyway, there are other ways though. I should tell him my idea, but he won't like it, I can almost hear his thoughts ready to say no to whatever I suggest.
“Why don’t we branch out into a new market Mike? There are human adults out there, not just children. We can make them laugh. We could even do special shows in front of thousands and convince them we are humans wearing costumes as part of the comedy show, they will never know. It will be brilliant.”
I know exactly what he is going to say because it’s the same thing I would say. Adults are smarter, they will find out about us, they will come through a door.
“Sulley.. You’re not serious are you? The adults are much more intelligent than the children. One of them will find out, all it takes is one. They will send people through a door into our city, and I don’t even want to imagine what will happen then, it’s to horrific.”
“It’s worth a try isn’t it? We can take precautions to make sure a human doesn’t get through. Humans aren’t toxic you know. You do remember Boo don’t you Mike?”
“We have to go back to scaring Sulley. It’s the only hope we have. A new generation has come through so most of the children we visit these days have never been scared by a monster. The screams will be so powerful the city will be back to full power reserve in a day, two at the most. That will give us a bit of time to think about what direction we are going to head in. You know deep down it’s the only way Sulley.”
He’s right. And I know he’s right. That’s the worst part. It’s the necessary course of action to keep Monstropolis and its monsters safe and well, but I swore to myself as long as I was CEO the company would never go back into the scaring business again.
“Mike, who is going to scare? All the new monsters have never been taught how. We taught them how to make children laugh. It takes two years of training and another year of work experience to get good at it. You and me both know that’s time we don’t have. Even if I agreed with the scare idea, it can’t be done.”
And just like that I realised what he was thinking. He can’t be serious. He knows how I feel. He is my best friend, a friend would never ask for something like that.
“Sulley. You were the best scarer Monstropolis has ever seen. You won the Scareathon 7 years in a row. The closest anybody came to that was Randall who won three, but that was before you started scaring, and everyone knows he cheated anyway.”
So not only does he want to start the scaring business again which he knows I am against, he wants me to do the scaring which I am even stronger opposed to. But what can I say. If I say no I may as well destroy Monstropolis myself.
"Imagine if every kid you scare was Boo, or Boo's kids. Would you still do it Mike? The look on their face when they wake up to us is terrible, it gives me nightmares, how can you ignore that? How do you sleep knowing so many children can't because they are terrified, and we are the cause of it.
He can't be that cold hearted. I must have got to him, on some level at least.
"But Sulley, every kid isn't Boo, all we do is scare them and prevent the possibility of the destruction of Monstropolis, is that really so bad? In the end it's your decision Sulley, whatever you choose the city will obey, but you have to pick the thing best for us, not the best thing for human children.
I don't know what to say. For the first time in my life I am at a loss for words, he is looking straight at me, not staring, just questioning, waiting for an answer as if hoping I will have the solution. But I don't all I can do is look straight back and hope he realises this time I don't have the answer, and this time I won't give in to his solution because his solution goes against everything I believe in.
Thursday, August 12, 2010
THE ADVENTURES OF BARTMAN!!! (Nathan's Final)
THE ADVENTURES OF BARTMAN!!!
Chief Clancy Wiggum, Lou and Eddie are out on patrol on a dark and gloomy night in Springfield. Wiggum has cravings for the new Double Krusty Burger.
Wiggum orders “I’ll have two Krusty Double Burger’s with Cheese, fries and a litre of cola.”Only to find static on the speakers at the drive thru.
He repeats this several times before accidently discharging his weapon and shooting Lou in the foot. On closer inspection the Krusty Burger joint is empty, not an employee or customer in sight. In pain, Lou needs ice for his wound. So Chief Wiggum being the hero he is climbs in through the drive thru window, after struggling up on Eddie’s shoulders, gets stuck in the window before falling through and bouncing on the vinyl floor. He then looks up to see Krusty’s monkey, Bubbles, tied up under the counter with a banana jammed in his mouth and a note scribbled in ketchup on the floor.
As the note comes into focus, Sideshow Bob’s voice begins to read... “The Laughter has been turned to tears, the clown is gone, so you must fear, he will not be returning from his isle of grease. Don’t track me down or you’ll end up in piece...s.... SB”
Wiggum onto it in a flash, books tickets to Greece. All the while Eddie and the monkey are bandaging Lou’s foot.
The scene cuts to Krusty being tormented over a pit of Krusty Burgers. The shot zooms out to show that Krusty is not in Greece but in fact in the newest establishment in the Krusty Burger Chain...”Krusty Burger Alcatraz”
Scene cuts again to Wiggum, Lou, Eddie and the monkey hopping off a plane in the Greek islands to begin searching the local night club life to find Krusty. Fades out when Wiggum takes off his Blue Police shirt, waving it around his head and dancing.
Krusty is in trouble....Barney wanders into Krusty Burger Springfield after a night out at Moe’s. He sees the note and immediately signals for help.
The Krusty doll next to Bart’s bed starts to flash calling Bartman to action. He leaps out of his bed in his pyjamas, climbs across to the tree house and slides down the tree to the Bartcave (nothing more than a hollow in the tree with a shiny green skateboard). He puts on the tight purple and grey outfit and jumps on the skateboard, skating off into the distance.
Barmarnt pulls up to a stop at the Van Houtens’ house. Milhouse is fast asleep in bed, cuddling his Malibu Stacey. Bartman taps on the window. Milhouse stirs and puts on his glasses to see Bartman silhouetted against the moon. Instantaneously Milhouse jumps to action, slips on his outfit, jumps out the window, uncovers a red bicycle (with training wheels) and joins Bartman.
Cuts back to Wiggum dancing the night away. Lou pipes up from across the bar “Ahhh Chief, I don’t think Krusty is in Greece, the monkey tells me he is afraid to fly” pointing to Bubbles who has had far too many Banana coladas.
Sometime later.....
Bartman and Milhouse pull up to a rickety old wharf in stormy weather to find the Sea Captain operating the ferry to Alcatraz. “Gharrrr, where you be heading me matey’s??” Bartman points to the island in the distance. Milhouse begins shaking, begging to go back to Springfield. Bartman exclaims there is no way Sideshow Bob can take away his hero. They set off on the boat across the stormy seas.
When they dock on the island they see a flashlight coming down to meet them. It is night patrolman Flanders “Hideli Hodeli Caped Crusaderino”... Flanders then explains how since the passing of Maud he has had to take on extra work to cover Todd and Rod’s tuition.
Tracking up the dark path, bats flutter past. Mihouse still shaking closely follows Bartman. To their surprise Sideshow Mel (Krusty’s able assistant) jumps out from the bushes flanked by Jimbo, Kearny and Dolph. The school bullies. They attack. Bartman jumps into action. They fight. Bam! Pow! Kapow! The duo overpower their attackers and continue up the path.
They finally arrive at the base of Krusty Burger Alcatraz, and break in through the unlocked basement window. After several scenes showing Bartman and Milhouse searching through storage rooms, behind the counter and in the dining area, they decide to head into the smoking section and up the Krusty Tower. Peering through the key hole they see Sideshow Bob standing over Krusty passed out with the contents of a Krusty Burger next to him on the floor.
They enter the room. Sideshow Bob explains that Krusty has been stealing the jokes of others for many years and he could not take it anymore. Even the new Double Krusty Burger recipe wasn’t Krusty’s own work. Bartman and Sideshow Bob duel, with swords, guns and finally Bartman pulls out his slingshot, and shoots Bob square between the eyes. All the while Milhouse tries to revive Krusty.
Fades to black, then blazing sunshine as Chief Wigam, Lou and Eddie drag Sideshow Bob out of the Krusty tower. Bob steps on a rake, which hits him in the nose. Wigam finally states “Book him Lou”
Fades to Black. Credits roll.
Wednesday, August 4, 2010
Kevin's Fanfiction Reviews
A fan fiction focused on one of the supporting characters of the horror film '28 Days Later'. Begins as a third-person narrative using descriptive language to bring forth the features of the character; Mark, to the audience. Narrated in a sombre tone, Mark runs through the dark setting of the story which is revealed to be a flashback dream sequence as he awakes. The fan fiction continues in first-person as Mark, now in the present, fights for his survival against an infected intruder only to be revealed that Mark himself has now become infected.
Features good use of descriptive language although the story seems fairly rushed, lacking pacing and climatic build-up. Interesting use of third and first-person narratives to separate the flashback and the present. Some spelling and grammatical errors.
3/5
Planet of the Apes - Monkey Business
A first-person narrative based on the setting of the 'Planet of the Apes'. The story is primarily focused on the main character; Professor Cornelius, as he undertakes experiments on test animals leading to the death of the subjects, remaining apathetic on the conditions of such experiments. Cornelius, shown later to be working under the direction of the other main character, Governor Spankin. The plot line of the story is revealed to be an attempt to subdue a rebellion uprising through the use of a giant laser weapon. Upon deploying the weapon a twist is unveiled to the audience that the characters we had been following were in fact the apes themselves.
Although lacking in plot clarity for the majority of story, this fan fiction includes good character development through description and interaction, featuring a very well placed climatic twist.
3.5/5
American Pie - Let's Make A Little Bet
A story following one of the principal characters of the 'American Pie' series; Steve Stifler, who is commonly referred to as just 'Stifler', as he goes on an adventure in search of women. Other main characters include Stifler's friends; Jim, Kevin and Finch. The scene opens with Stifler; a rude, obnoxious male with his counterpart Finch; a calm and methodical person, as Stifler tries his luck in attracting a girl he meets. This nameless woman would later return as a supporting character of which the main plot is based upon.
This fan fiction features accurate portrayals of the characters, staying true to the tone set by the original series. The story itself does not flow very well, the scenes tend to change without warning to the reader. Needs work on correcting spelling and grammatical errors.
2/5
Alvin and the Chipmunks - Dave, You Lost Your Voice
A fan fiction about Dave, an enthusiastic chipmunk with a talent and love for singing, one of the chipmunk characters featured in 'Alvin and the Chipmunks'. Featured alongside his other singing chipmunk companions; Dave finishes up a concert for the night with an astonishing cover of Corinne Baileys Rae's 'Put your records on'. After a night of continual singing practice the plot's staggering climax is unveiled as Dave loses his voice during a performance of Katy Perry's Hot N Cold. The tension builds as the chipmunks rush to Dave's aid. After an extensive analysis of Dave's esophageal structure the Doctor revealed that Dave in fact has a sore throat. Over the next week Dave begins a battle for his life, eventually making a miraculous recovery against all odds.
An inspiring tale of passion and loyalty that will keep you on the edge of your seat, guaranteeing you will never look at chipmunks the same way again.
6/5
Sex and the City - Blinded
A fan fiction narrated in third-person about Carrie, based on the events of the first 'Sex and the City' movie. Carrie's long time partner and love interest; Big, had abruptly abandoned her on their wedding day leaving Carrie in distress as she battles her emotions. The narrative gives a clear insight into the inner thoughts of Carrie as she continues to live her life, moving into the future trying to forget the past.
An extremely well written piece of literature exploring the themes of love and pain. The author does well in developing Carrie as the qualities of her character really shine through to the reader. A thought provoking read that is overshadowed only by it's minor spelling errors.
4.5/5
Ghostbusters - Slime can cause very sad things to happen
A fan fiction following the character of 'Ray', a rage induced ghostbuster bent on unleashing his anger. The story revolves around a blob of slime which had attached itself to Ray after being attracted by his strong emotions. This causes Ray to enter a heightened sense of anger as he unleashes his rage in a spurt of violence towards a friend trying to help. After nearly beating his friend to death he has a moment of realisation.
Quite a violent story with good descriptive language to illustrate the brutality. However the plot itself will leave you a bit confused as the author seems to move through the narrative fairly quickly without offering any explanations. A fan fiction which raises more questions than it answers.
3/5
Hannah Montana - It's not over
This fan fiction follows the character 'Jake' in first-person as he looks back on his past. Throughout the story we are taken on an emotional journey, vividly gaining an insight into Jake's mind as it goes through an internal conflict. Reminiscing on the relationship he had with Miley, Jake is lavished with remorse, unable to let go of his past as his actions come back to haunt him.
Overall this piece does an extremely good job of illustrating the internal conflict of the character. It is written in such a way that you feel as though you are there with the central character through his emotional collapse. Very good development of the story as it progresses with my only gripe centered towards the grammatical errors which seemed to tarnish the piece.
3/5
Totally Spies - In Paris
A fan fiction following two characters within the Totally Spies series; Sam and Tim, as they prepare for their vacation to Paris. The story begins with a flashback of the couple giving the reader an insight as to how the story had progressed to its present setting. Through the use of very descriptive language, strong imagery is imposed on the reader as the couple interact intimately, using dialogue to progress character development. As the flashback ends we are brought back to the present time where Sam is preparing to leave for her vacation with Tim. Brief dialogue is shared with supporting characters; Alex and Clover before the narrative concludes.
I applaud the author's use of descriptive language techniques to really force strong imagery, giving the impression that the characters were physically present with the reader. Some spelling mistakes are apparent in this fan fiction however.
3.5/5
Ice Age - Two Hearts into One
An Ice Age fan fiction following two possums; Crash and Eddie as they adventure through the woods. The two brothers are initially very similar, though as the characters develop we are easily able to see the differences between them. Eddie is a rather cowardly possum who thinks very deeply contrasted by his brother Crash who is very daring but often foolish. The narrative gives insight into Eddie's thoughts, especially those concerning Crash and their differences. Crash eventually confronts Eddie about his thoughts, however Eddie dismisses him and they continue playing.
The author makes very good use dialogue to really develop the differences between what would be two very similar characters. Eddie's monologue gives the reader a deeper view of the character, further adding to his development as a character. Good use of personification is also present however the story really lacks in spelling and grammar, this point alone really tarnished what could have been a very well polished piece.
2/5
Pirates of the Caribbean - When I Find the Ocean
Jack Sparrow features predominantly in this Pirates of the Caribbean fan fiction, set after the events of the final movie in the trilogy. Believing to be free at last to wander the seas with his beloved ship; the Black Pearl, Jack accompanied by his first mate 'Gibbs' discover that they have been tracked by another ship, a pirate ship. Jack makes a bold gamble to turn the Black Pearl around in order to confront this new threat. Allowing the opposing ship's captain to board Jack and this mysterious new character face off before the revealing herself to be the sister of Elizebeth Swann, a prominent character of the original series.
Among one of most well written fan fictions I have come across, the author does an amazing job of bringing forth the life of each character, staying very true to the source material. The dialogue is convincing and polished, allowing the reader to feel the refinement of each word. The plot development was well received, tension build up was present leading to a very rewarding climax.
4.5/5
Sunday, August 1, 2010
Rosa Fanfiction Review
This fan-fiction basically is for fairies who lived in Pixie Hollow and this is the secret heart of Never Land. All fairies lived in the old maple tree grown in Pixie Hollow and in this house there live hundreds of fairies and sparrow men. Tinker Bell is a fairy who have a talent for making pots and these pots fairies in Pixie Hollow used it for their cooking. Actually all fairies in the Pixie Hollow each one of them have their own talents. In this fanfic is about the new fairy arrived in Pixie Hollow and the queen told all fairies to welcome the new fairy to the family. Tinker Bell is a very friendly fairy in the whole place in Pixie Hollow. She always help out her friends when they need any kind of help. The writer of this fanfiction of Tinker Bell random the whole story in the way that children will like to read more about Tinker Bell the fairy who lived in Pixie Hollow with lots of fairies and their queen.
Tinker Bell and the lost treasure
This fanfic is very happy ending when this poor little girl want to play outside with the rain. However in the land she lived is always sunny and she think that having sun everyday are not much fun. One day she stood next to her window and dreaming about having a rain instead of sun. She also want to own a cloud and this can make her easier to control the cloud to get raining if she want it any time she needs it. After that she fall asleep and she woke up in the morning her friend Dizzy already soaking wet. She thought her friend just come from the beach, however, Dizzy told her that she actually had a lovely time in the rain outside. Rani didn't know that she actually asked for this to happen that she is going to have and control the cloud. So where ever she went the cloud follow and the poor land actually raining all days. All fairies are so angry and disappointed that they not able to finish their works because they don't have more sun but the every day in Pixie Hollow always. Tinker Bell found her friend outside and they want to go and looked for the lost treasure. This treasure is the most important in the life of fairies in Pixie Hollow. What a found in the story is not exactly Tinker Bell who looked for the lost treasure as the writer of the fan-fiction wrote about, however in the story of the Tinker Bell, it was Rida who was looking for the lost treasure.
Vidia and the Fairy Crown
This fanfic is about the two fairies name Beck and Rosetta. Vidia is basically be banned from the place of fairies because she actually stole some feather from the Mother Dove and attached to herself to make her fly faster and she got punished from this for what she did. What happen when all fairies got busy with there works and duties and after that the Crown had been stolen from the queen closet. The fairy who discovered this went and told the queen of what was happen to the crown. The queen called the meeting agented and everybody come and they quite shocked what is this meeting are about. When everybody arrived the queen told them the party has been cancel. Everybody murmured and whispered a each other without any words. The queen made an announcement that the crown had been lost from the closet. Everybody turned t Vidia because they believed that she is the one she possible stole the crown. After that Vidia made a decision that she is going to do a private investigation for the lost crown to proved the queen and all he fairies in the Pixie Hollow she didn't took it.
Fawn and the chipmunk
Snow White
Snow White and the Seven Dwarf Cousins
This fanfic is about the seven dwarf cousins are quite happy that their cousins are able to visit them. Seven Dwarf normally go to the mine to collected gold from the morning until night. However the day they actually went to the mine to collected gold and they want to come home early to prepared everything for their coming guests. When the seven dwarf came home they are really tired and no one want to do anything. Few minutes later the girl appeared from somewhere that the dwarf didn't know where is this beautiful girl come from. After the girl arrived she called out her friends to come and help out to clean the whole house for guests they will arrived soon. What I think about this fanfic is well prepared and and also the writer are more familiar with the story of Snow White very well.
This fanfic is about the the girl who actually still about the stepmother try to killed her step-daughter because when ever she asked the mirror and the mirror told her that Snow White is the prettiest girl on the world. The stepmother got angry and she want to poison her. She bought a nicest and fine apple and put some poison in it and there she went to look for Snow White. She found her and turn herself to an old poor woman and she asked her if she want to buy an apple. Snow White felt sorry for her and she bought the apple and she took a huge bite and there she got poison from the apple from the witch, however she actually didn't know that the apple is already been poison from her stepmother.
Happy Ever After
This fanfic is the end of the story when Snow White died and the poor 7 brothers of her felt so sad and disappointed for what was happen to their sister. However while these brothers sad around the coffin and finally the handsome guy came along on the horse. He asked the 7 brothers what happen to their sister. The dwarf told him that their sister died because she been poison by someone. The prince hopped off from his horse and he went straight to the coffin and he bend down and kissed the beautiful girl in the coffin. Finally Snow White awaken and the prince took her to his palace and getting married afterward.
Thursday, July 29, 2010
Lydia's fanfiction reviews
1. Sleeping walk
This fan fiction gives lots of description of the characters’ inner world. The story continues the misunderstanding between the main character Rhett and Scarlett. The story deeply describes the feeling of losing their unborn child which the author of “Gone with the wind” didn’t concentrate on. It explores the softness within both Rhett and Scarlett. The characteristic had been changed a little bit. Such as: Scarlett flooded her tears out in front of Rhett. However, in the original story Scarlett would always avoid from crying by convincing herself “tomorrow is another day” and she always keeps herself strong and almost adamant.
2. She belongs to me
This fanfic borrows the plot from the original that Rhett was “besotted with his child” and Scarlett was even jealous her own child sometimes. The settings are the same, and even the dialect was tried to maintain as same as the original story when Mammy was talking to Scarlett. There are lots of conversations between Rhett and Scarlett. Although the conversations sounds the two main characters were trying to hurt each other, they still love each other. It is just that neither of them would like to express the feeling. At the end of the fanfic, Scarlett said “Besides, honey I belong to you” sounds a bit abrupt as Scarlett never thought she belongs to anyone. If she thinks she belongs to Rhett, there wouldn’t be so much conflict and misunderstanding between them. However, it won’t degrade the whole article. Good fanfic after all.
3. Returning
This is a description of Rhett’s returning to their house in Peachtree Street as had promised Scarlet to keep the gossip down. It continues the plot and concentrate on Rhett’s feeling where as the original story has lots of descriptions of Scarlett’s feeling. It shows Rhett’s love for Scarlett is always although he left her. Rhett’s feeling is a mystery in the original. Readers can only tell his feeling from the descriptions of his facial expression such as: raised eyebrows, determined eyes, corner of his mouth were down.
4. Always Scarlett
This fanfic add a happy ending for the two main characters. It has four reviews and is in favour with all of them. Scarlett and Rhett had both learnt from their previous mistakes in their marriage. In this fanfic they both seemed start to think from each other’s perspective and try to understand each other. There are fine descriptions of characters’ interior monologue. Conversations between Scarlett and Rhett suit their characteristics. However it sounds a bit too fast to me that the story comes to its ending. The two main characters had been misunderstood each other since they first met. Therefore, I believe there should be some drama for their reunion too.
5. Unravel
This is a terrific fanfic. It has 102 reviews which show how well approved by readers. It keeps the same setting and characters and even maintains their characteristics. There are fine descriptions of the characters. In this fanfic Rhett still tease Scarlett about her love to Ashley Wilkes. It’s actually his own way of getting Scarllet’s attention. His love for Scarlett was from the first time they met, but he was afraid to show it because he knew Scarlett doesn’t love him. This fanfic also has Melanie another main character of Gone with the wind. She is still the most warm hearted, gentle but determined lady in here. She invited Rhett the most unwelcomed one to the Christmas party in her house which needed lots of courage. She is an important figure who can not be neglected in both the original story and the fanfic although she possessed small sections.
6. Seven years later
This is another popular fanfic which continues the story to the next generation. Wade and Ella both seemed have some of their mother Scarlett’s characteristics which are opposite to the original story. Some new characters are added into the story.
7. A new life
This is the continuing story for sequel of Gone with the wind. The sequel is called “Scarlett” which has a happy ending for Rhett and Scarlett and also gives them another baby called Cat. This fanfic describes their life after escape from the tower.
8. Gone with the wind
This is a rewrite of the story that changes the setting to 21st century. Some of the linguistic features are changed as well. The language is not restrained anymore. The expression of love and interest are straight forward.
9. The train
This is Rhett side of the story what happened after he told Scarlett that he is going to leave her. It keeps the sad ending for the story. However, it can be easily continued with after his arrival of Charleston.
10. The final chapter
This is an additional chapter added to the ending. Basically describes how Rhett remembered their marriage. This fanfic has changed the characteristics of Rhett and Scarlett. Rhett is strong and clever but never violent in the original story. He is a real gentle man but different from ordinary people. Scarlett is clever and strong too. She never shows her weakness or tears in front of people. However, this fanfic changed them all.
Wednesday, July 28, 2010
Nathan's Fanfiction Reviews
Family Guy - Flag This
This Fanfiction has been written as a full episode of the Family Guy cartoon and could easily be made into a real episode of the animated series created by Seth Macfarlene. A very humorous piece of writing that definitely follows the Family Guy Series original form of comedy. It has been written in a script format, making it easy to follow, picture the episode and understand what is happening from start to finish. Characters throughout the fanfiction piece clearly share the same characteristcs of those in the series making the writing more humorous and a lot like the animated show. This is evident through the unique dialogue used by each character. The constant use of flashbacks and cutaway scenes are very creative and share Family Guy's intention in being very random, adding to the humour. This fanfiction piece is a great comical read for Family Guy fans that follow the series.
The Simpsons - Homer the Cop
'Homer the Cop' is an attempt at a plot of an original Simpson's episode. Written in the form of a story is is easy to follow and see what the author has attempted to create. This is a short piece of writing involving the characters of Homer Simpson, Ned Flanders and Clancy 'Chief' Wigum. The characters have shared the same relationships as they do in the animated series. I.e. Homer's dislike for Ned Flanders. Although characters are clear, the dialouge used throughout the short story is not similar to that used throughout the episodes. This makes the piece of writing less funny. The author has tried to follow in the comedic style of the Simpson's, created by Matt Groening, with an original storyline of Homer stealing Wigum's cop car and getting himself into trouble for it. A good attempt at a fanfiction for The Simpsons cartoon and with a bit of work can be developed further.
The Hangover - How Phil Got Injured
This Fanfiction piece of writing has been done as part of the movie 'The Hangover'. The author has written an idea of how a character in the film got injured that was not explained in the movie. During this comedy movie we know that Phil (one of the main characters) was in hospital with concusion and other injuries, but the viewers are never told how he ended up in hospital. This Fanfic author has attempted to make a reason as to how Phil got injured on the night of his friend's bachelor party. The author's idea is very original and quite amusing. The author keeps in the theme of the movie very well as the characters were clear and have been represented through their actions and humerous dialogue. Unique parts of the movie were brought into the piece of writing which made it easy to follow and relate back to the movie. A successful piece of fanfiction writing.
Tropic Thunder - Tropic Blunder
The author of this piece is writing is based on the comedy movie 'Tropic Thunder"'. The author however has only done chapter one. The writing is not clear and quite short so you will have had to have seen the movie to understand what the author has tried to create. The introduction is very funny and is a good start to the piece of work. The author has attemped to use all the main characters in the opening chapter but it is difficult to gain an understanding of them. The fanfiction makes for an interesting read as it is full of action. I believe the author should continue to work on this piece and add more chapters.
Pineapple Express - A Dopeland Fairytale
This fanfic writing for Pineapple Express has been written as a day in the life of Kelly. She is not a character in the movie but the writing involves the main characters of the movie Dale, Saul and Red. The chapter titled 'This Is Your Life', goes through a day of Kelly's life after a party which she can not remember alot of. The piece of writing starts off funny alot like the movie and how the main characters are represented. The chapter gives the reader a background into Kelly, her life and feelings and how she has come to be involved with the Pineapple Express characters. The chapter ends with Dale letting Kelly know about another party on the next night with his friends Saul and Red. This leaves readers looking forward to chapter two and asking what will happen at this next party with the Pineapple Express crew. This author should continue her story. Bringing the main characters more into the story could make this more humerous.
Family Guy - I Pity The Fool
This is a short piece of fan fiction based on the Family Guy cartoon. It has been written in the form of a flashback or cutaway scene that often happens during the Family Guy episodes. The flashback occurs when Peter Griffen is stuck in the stairs and has a flashback to when he was in a worse situation when he met 'Mr T' at the airport. It is definitely an original piece of fan fiction because it is such a unique idea. It is a very random cutaway/flashback, but the more random the better in the case of the Family Guy animated series. It wasn't as funny as I thought it could be, but being so random this flashback could work for the family guy series. Also the use of 'Mr T' in any Family Guy episode is usually humorous. A very farfetched fanfiction but could definitely work for those Family Guy fans.
The Simpsons - Bartman Adventures
The Bartman Adventures are a series of stories about Bart Simpson as a Superhero in Springfield. This fan fiction describes the character very effectively, both Bart's characteristics and the Bartman superhero he becomes by night are clearly evident. The author has created a funny piece of fanfiction that involves other characters of The Simpsons episodes including Chief Wiggum, Jimbo Jones as the villain and Milhouse as Bartman's sidekick. This fanfiction is only the beginning of the adventure and the author is attempting to continue with the 'Bartman Adventures' and looking for a major villain to take down the defender of Springfield. If developed further, this author could create many adventures by including further characters from The Simpsons episodes.
The Hangover - Fun Night
The Hangover movie is a great film to base a fanfiction on. I really enjoyed a 'Fun Night' and is the best piece of fanfiction I have read so far. The author has written this work as if it was before the movie starts, before they wake up after there night out in Las Vegas. It describes the main characters heading back to there Hotel Villa in the messy state they were in. A very funny piece of writing, and being a fan of the movie found the writing enjoyable to read. This fanfiction has a great use of humerous dialouge that captures the qualities of all the characters (Alan, Phil, Doug and Stu) very well and the moods they would have been in after the night. This piece of fanfiction could have easily been apart of the movie as an introduction, illustrating the different characters and setting for the film. Overall, a great piece of fanfiction, very funny, relates well to the movie and has captured the characters perfectly.
Pineapple Express - Just Another Day
'Just Another Day' has been written as a scene that takes place after the movie 'Pineapple Express' where Dale (the main character) ends his relationship with his girlfriend. It is a very short piece of writing but amusing. The fanfiction includes the characters Dale, Saul, Red and Dale's girlfirend Angie. There is great use of dialogue used by the characters that is both funny and gives the impression that they are not phased about the adventure they have been through, similar to that of the movie. I enjoyed this fanfiction mainly because of the dialogue used by Red and Dale. The ending is not as funny as the opening sequence of the fanfiction and could be worked on and involvement of the three main characters could make the conclusion more amusing.
The Simpsons - Weird Springfield
Another Fanfiction that has been based on 'The Simpsons' episodes created by Matt Groening. The author has set the story in Moe's Tavern involving the characters of Moe, Homer and Barney. The Story is easy to follow but quite random as the author has tried to make it scary by being a Halloween story. The author has captured the character of Moe very successfully throught the angry and old character created. The other characters have not been developed so well and do not represent them as they would appear in the TV show. I was disappointed that the fanfic story was not very funny. Based on The Simpsons animated series I was hoping for a humorous piece of fanfic. This shows the difficulty in attempting to write a comedic type fanfiction. The end of the story eds with Moe never being seen again. A poor ending to the fanfiction.
Sigrid Fanfiction Reviews
IF A BODY CATCH A BODY COMING THROUGH THE RYE
This fanfic was written as part of the authors school English project. He has clearly well researched the book. The voice he has given to the character Holden is near identical to the one given to him by Salinger, the original author. He has also referred to events that took place in the original, something I think is important to maintain the mood of the book. Had the author been too liberal with his imagination in this fanfic it would have deterred from the message in the story. Holden battles an inner monologue familiar to most adolescents, touching on themes of depression, alienation and sexuality. First published in 1951 this fanfic reveals the relevance it still holds among modern readers, and the ease at which the author was able to re-create Holden's voice shows that the themes of the book are still universal.
500 DAYS OF AUTUMN
This fanfiction is terrible. As a follow-up to the film 500 Days of Summer I found it predictable that the 'story' be based on a girl named Autumn. As it happens Autumn is a real character from the film and not a cringe-inducing attempt at irony. The fanfic is as cliched as you would expect and it appears the author is using it as a diary entry for his own failed relationships. It is written in first person as a male character but I am convinced the author is a lonely and desperate female who is living vicariously through the Summer/Autumn fantasy. Apart from the spelling and grammar bombshells the fanfic re-creates perfectly the unimportant sap of the original film, and in that sense the authors writing is a success.
THE FLIGHT
A well written fanfiction based on the film Breakfast at Tiffany's. It recalls a moment that took place in the film (or book); the famed kiss between Holly Golightly and 'Fred'. The author has set the scene competently and Fred's apartment and the New York stoop are pictured clearly in my mind reading this. Holly Golightly is originally enigmatic and neurotic with a naive spontaneity about her, a thick skin she has developed due to her job as an escort. The character the author of the fanfic has created differs from this as her thoughts and feelings are exposed due to the style of narrative they have used. Holly is self-analytical in the fanfic when she should be remaining a mystery to the reader.
ONE LESS LOOSE END
This fanfiction is based on two characters from the film American Psycho - Patrick Batemam and Donald Kimball. In the scene Bateman kills the police detective Kimball, then contemplates his existence. The spelling of Kimballs name changes throughout, an error that adds to the somewhat unkempt retelling of the fictional scene. The film is narrated by Bateman using passages from the book by Bret Easton Ellis so the character has a pre-established personality. Patrick is a twenty-something wealthy Wall Streeter, a victim of the eighties boom in yuppie culture, with an affinity to fine food, clothes, women, alcohol and murder. The author has used these obvious character traits with little imagination and no real attempt at furthering the story. His vocabulary is true to the narration style used by Ellis but his execution is poor and he has failed to make sense of an event that could have been a great addition to the original plot.
UNINTENTIONS
This is a sinister take on a Winnie the Pooh tale. It is very brief and a work of complete fiction. Though it is not referencing any existing Pooh story the author has managed to explore depth in the characters regardless. It is told with the same inquisitive nature of original Pooh, all the while discussing themes of suicide and alcoholism in the fabled young animals. To successfully re-create the tale telling so distinctive to A.A. Milne in a few paragraphs is a great achievement on the authors part.
PINE BARRENS
A fanfiction based on the staple Sopranos episode "Pine Barrens" in which Christopher and Paulie take their colleague from the Russian mob, Valery, out to the woods to shoot and bury. In the episode he escapes but due to it being a snow storm they assume him dead. This fanfiction gives an alternate ending to the episode and Valery lives, finding his way back to the road and stealing Christopher and Paulies car. It is plausible as a Sopranos plot and I would have enjoyed the episode had it played out that way but it is difficult to believe in text form as the over describing of Valerys surroundings in the forest takes away from the "kill or be killed" suspense that Sopranos is famous for.
LOVE
This fanfiction is based on the film My Neighbour Totoro. It is told from Totoro's point of view. He is the spirit of a forest where two girls, Mei and Satsuki, move to the neighbourhood of. Their mother is ill and he spends time with them, cheering them up. This fanfic tries to explain the love between Totoro and the two sisters. It is not told well, and if you have not seen the film it would leave a lot of gaps. I hope that my fanfiction, which is going to be based on the same film, does not come across this way.
GROWING UP
This fanfic is based seven years after the film My Neighbour Totoro. Satsuki and the boy interest Kanta have grown together and are falling for each other. It is more about the relationship between Kanta and Satsuki than about Totoro and the other keepers of the forest. It deals with facing adulthood and whether that will mean losing the power to see Totoro, along with their innocence. I am not so interested in this aspect of the Totoro story.
LAST RIDE
Similar to the LOVE fanfic this is about Kanta and Satsuki growing up and forming a bond. They take their last ride on the Cat Bus together before becoming too old for the fantasy. The fanfiction has conveyed the excitement Satsuki and Mei felt riding in the Cat Bus in the film, I hope to somehow convey this in my own fanfic.